Wednesday, November 19, 2008
The Future (Abandoned)
A forest with one tree.
Rainbow: Red.
An ocean in one drop
Of water. One Belief: Peace.
Beginning to feel boundless.
Revealing exactly what? One
dream different
than it was moments before.
One fantasy. One soul.
A Heart, balancing for one true love.
We've weathered A few storms?
It doesn't seem that way.
Daybreaks that come and go.
We Confused
One for another.
One song, drowning in moonlight. A
haystack, looking for another needle.
To see words.
To see the truth.
To see how it evolves
From one tree into a forest.
Note: November 19, 2008 - November 22, 2008.
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23 comments:
This poem, "the future - unfinished" really is unfinished, and will change all day today. . . November 19 and into tomorrow. . .
It's already changed twice. Believe me. I know.
This is how it started.
A forest with one tree.
Rainbow: red.
An ocean of one drop.
Of water.
Comments if anyone should leave any will be incorporated into the poem. By the time "the future - unfinished" is finshed, it might not even be a poem.
A million welcomes and thanks.
One reader, perhaps as shy as I, sent me an e-mail. . . so I have changed the poem again - to add the word 'belief.'
One soul looking for another
Thank you Robert.
How appropriate thatyour poem evolves as life does, ever changing, ever different than it was moments before.
Love it.
nicely done and thankyou for the link..:))
observer of souls - I used your words "different than it was moments before. . ." in part of the poem. I hope you like it. . . your words (and 'confused's' too) are linked to your sites.
Thank you for the comment.
Ooh, that's lovely! Unfinished? Really? It doesn't seem that way.
Susan - Thank you. The poem has been changing all day. . . every comment makes it change. I've now used your line. . ."it doesn't seem that way" in the poem. Those words are now linked to your blog. If you don't like it there or how I've used it please let me know. The poem transforms with every input.
Also, I added the words: "a few storms" which is an anagram of your site "west of mars."
Koe, this is an interesting concept, I'll definitely be back to see how it evolves :)
cool! thanks for the link!
And yet it grows
The search
Of one being
For another
Cool...
(btw, the anagram's impressive!)
Thanks Everyone.
Willow. . . I used your words "to see how it evolves" in the poem. If you don't like how it's used please let me know. . . I will probably keep changing this poem. . . I've also linked your words to your site.
Observer and Susan. . . thanks and you're welcome. . .
Robert. . . I am going to try to work 'one for another' into the poem tomorrow.
'night all.
Oh Koe, I do believe I don't understand what to do...?
Koe...you have SOOOOO many comments now! I'm beginning to feel like a little, tiny bumblebee at the bottom of the honey hive, and everybody else here is a gigantic wasp! :(
this is fascinating I am hooked..:)
to see words from different people blend and flow is interesting as all get out...:)
I loved the phrase "a haystack looking for another needle" ~ That is exactly what it can feel like.
Loved this ~ It's very peaceful and flowing.
SunShine - thank you for the comments. I used your words 'exactly what' in the poem(from the sentence 'that is exactly what it can feel like'). Please let me know if you'd like me to change how I used the words. I also linked those words to your site.
Robert - I grabbed 'one for another' from your earlier comment and sneaked 'confused' in there too. I also used 'to see words' from your later comment. I hope you like what I've done.
Charity - you did perfectly well. I've used your words 'beginning to feel' in the poem. Thank you for the comment. . . your words are also linked to your site.
If you want me to change what I have done please let me know.
Thank you all for the comments and your visits.
I enjoyed that well done..:)
Robert, Observer, Susan, Willow, Charity, Sunshine,
Thank you for your comments and contributions. You might have noticed that the poem changed from The Future (Unfinished) to The Future (Abandoned) today.
I've enjoyed this process tremendously. I hope we'll do it again someday.
Very Interesting! Seems very apt that everything ends with one or unity or so it seems, but actually in real life that is what it is, but seems so far apart..
oh dear... I hope I haven't confused you!
K. Fields - why, yes, I think I am confused.
Maybe I can unconfuse myself.
Hmmm. . . is that possible? I'd love to know what anyone thinks. Can a person unconfuse himself?
I'll try. I started this poem thinking that we're perhaps treating our world a little too carelessly. I was thinking there might be a future where we would have exactly one tree left, one drop of water, and even the rainbow would be parched and have just one color. . . red. One More Red Nightmare (a song) had come to mind.
The future is of course what we make it. . . and I thought a poem called The Future. . .should be unfinished until we worked on it.
So we did for a few days.
It changed a lot over that time.
The contributions of others were amazing.
I think what you're saying - if I am not confused is that:
We have one future. With a million possibilities. Or A Million futures, with one possibility. Or hmmmm the exact opposite.
Oh dear. I think I am still confused.
Tomorrow I will probably delete this comment and start over.
I love that all of you have left comments.
Koe
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