1.1a The seven words that ruined my life:
1.1b “She is madly in love with you”
2.1a Here’s the thing:
2.1b I want, you want, he wants, she wants
2.1c we want, you want, they want
2.1d But
3.1a Keeping in mind:
3.1b timing
3.1c if not now, when?
3.1d come back later, maybe next week
4.1a Leaving Room:
4.1b for negotiation
4.1c for give and take
4.1d for deniability
4.2a Making allowances for the inevitable losing streak
5.1a Everyone involved has:
5.1b a sporting chance
5.1c secrets
5.1d the right to airbrush over the economic realities
5.1e limited immunity against future prejudicial testimony
6.1a Public Notices
6.1b Greek chorus
6.1c local newspaper
6.1d physician assisted you know what
6.1e future sisters-in-law
7.1a Extras
7.1b front door key
7.1c work sharing (limited time only)
7.1d advantaged access
7.1e melodious yawning
8.1a Working Backwards
8.1b Absolutely no
8.1c would you reconsider
8.1d no
8.1e would you
August 08, 2008
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I should have done something different. Or perhaps not so different.
Here, perhaps is a better proposal. . . read the post above this one or above that one or the one below the first.
Thanks in advance for the comments.
I think it works great. It's got this fantastic staccato rhythm that lurches forward and back in weird leaps, just like a relationship where you never know what's up or what comes next. Nice job.
I think this one works very well actually. Yes, we're almost all guilty of relying on "marriage proposal" when we saw "failed proposal" - but a stock idea can still be original if you put a spin on it, and this is certainly to my mind the most original submission this week. It's like the stream of consciousness from a highly ordered and rational mind, full of major and minor premises, and all of them leading us through ideas we can sympathise with.
I love the last set, where he/she (?) asks them to reconsider. Ow - blunt.
This actually sums up my last ten months.
And you can hear my sigh of relief.
I like this post, I must admit I succumbed to the "marriage proposal" stint, but then again the topic was fitting for a recent development.
Thanks for the comments everyone. . . Countess I will drop by and read 'Stop at a Red Light' tomorrow. . . .late. (Your
I like it as it is. Well done, you. :)
I like it too - I particularly like the way you set the stage with the 7 words that ruined my life. Interesting technique - I'm tempted to try it out!
Lenore and Chefdruck. . . Thank you for the comments
When I wrote this posting: I never dreamed that I'd see the person who said the "7 words that ruined my life" again. (The person she said it about had long since stopped loving me madly.) The person who said it however. . . still meant a lot to me but I had not seen her in more years than I'd like to admit. Ok, you forced me, 30. This posting started me on the path to meet her again. . . And she is as wonderful as the day, I stupidly believed the, you know, the seven words that ruined my life.
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